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Matt Bellamy

  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Run, Little One

    Hi Biffle! I like this. You use very good description. However, the -- at the end of every line were a bit off-putting. I think there might be some instances ...

    Mar 5, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: The box

    Hi! I like your rhetorical questions in this poem, and the emotion in it. However I have a couple of suggestions - firstly, try splitting it up into seperate stanzas, ...

    Mar 5, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: my sister

    Hello! This is interesting. There are bits I like and bits I don't, so let's have a look. Golden locks A little cliché. Grass green eyes, Better, more original. A ...

    Mar 5, 2010
  • Lounge, The Re: BenFranks: Member of the Month for March 2010

    Beeeeeeen :D

    Mar 3, 2010
  • Information Desk Archive Re: Grammar

    And Facebook... *Twitches* It annoys me. Some of the groups, and what people say, and the sheer determination to get every word wrong! Well, that's Facebook, not a writing site. ...

    Mar 3, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: more random poems

    Hello! Welcome to YWS. Don't forget to review other people's work, and then you'll get more reviews too. :) I quite like these, particularly the first poem. It reminds me ...

    Mar 2, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: When The Sky cries... I don't know why

    Hi! I like this but I have a few suggestions for re-wording. "I don’t know why The reason why it rains" I don't think you need to say why twice ...

    Mar 2, 2010
  • Dramatic Poetry Re: Lies

    Hi! I really like this - it's very well written, good description, and it flowed very well. It also rhymed well and wasn't forced at all. Again and wind don't ...

    Feb 28, 2010
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Welcome to Hell

    Hi! I felt kind of bad for you because you don't have any reviews on this but I think it's mainly because it's so long. I would suggest maybe splitting ...

    Feb 28, 2010
  • General Articles Re: Let's Burn ITV

    Hey Ben! Sorta disagree that Britain makes the best comedies, I'm partial to a good American sitcom myself. ;) I think you should get rid of the ellipse at the ...

    Feb 28, 2010
  • Narrative Poetry Re: Crumpets and Jam

    This is really good. I'm not sure what relevance the first stanza has to the rest of the poem, though. I love the third stanza - it's so innocent and ...

    Feb 28, 2010
  • Lyrics Re: Here We Go Again

    Critiquing lyrics is hard! I don't find this particularly original. It is relatable, which is what I look for in a song, but I think you could say what you ...

    Feb 28, 2010
  • Other Re: Zenith

    I adore this. The imagery and the words you choose to describe it with are really original and interesting. I love how every part is a snapshot of something different ...

    Feb 28, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: What Does Your Heart Beat For?

    I like this but there are parts of it that I just don't understand and they seem a little unnecessary. Let's have a look: Everybody has a reason a reason ...

    Feb 28, 2010
  • Other Poetry Re: Adverbs

    I quite like this poem but I'm not sure what your point is. What exactly are you trying to say with this poem? I mean, I like the way it's ...

    Feb 28, 2010


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